As the plane landed I was honestly scared after all he told me about the way they live. I'm not a very helpful person when it comes to cooking or carrying heavy things. When we landed John said "I hope you like Duk Payue" I got up from my seat and I got my bag and walked out of the plane a bunch of kids came up to us and started to sing a song. When we finally got to his hut I pulled the curtain back and looked in, there was a blanket on the ground with a pillow on top of it, a bamboo table next to it with a rock bowl and what looked like a thick rock stick "home sweet home" john said, "its looks cozy" i said out of breath from the long walk. I walked in the hut and put my stuff down, "I miss this place" John said with a huge grin on his face, I couldn't help but smile to. "Come on it's time for dinner" John said, he grabbed my hand and took me outside. I looked outside to see many people playing and cooking dinner. "This is my wife and my two children" john said holding his wife's hand, I smiled and waved. We ate Black beans and fresh fruit with really good meat. After that we went to bed, It was a cold night and the ground was uncomfortable but i was so tired that i fell right asleep. When I woke up it was very early but everyone was up and John was singing A song called Kakiye Paruei That Lam Tungwar sings
"Good morning" I said to John "Sbah al khair" he replied "what does that mean?' I asked "Good morning" "cool" I said "guess what?" john said very excitedly. "We are seeing Lam Tungwar in concert!!" "COOL!!!, Um... Who's that?" i replied. "He wrote the song i was singing" john said laughing. We went to the concert a little later in the day and had a blast and they played that song he was singing. The next day I had to go home I had a bunch of fun.
Lily I really like your post. I especially like how you said that your not very helpful when it comes to cooking or carrying heavy things. It makes it seem more real that way.
Hi! I really likes how you said that you were scared of the way they live. I also really like how you said that when you got out of the plane a bunch of kids run up to yoou and started singing. I love how you described the food that you ate and how you put in the song by Lam Tungwar.
I like your landing and your conversation with John...songs...his hut...home sweet home...I like how you use dialog...meeting John's wife and kids...black beans and fruit...sleeping on the ground...love your waking up to John singing Lam Tungwar-great video..."Shah al khair"-great use of local language...concert...nice picture of John...I like your music video...I hadn't heard that one before. Lily, you tell a good story. Good use of the blog to tell it. All that was missing was a link. I have only two suggestions: 1. Use and editor to do one final go over for spelling and punctuation. You are close, but your words deserve a final go over and polish. Maybe stay a bit longer nest time you go so far.
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Lily I really like your post. I especially like how you said that your not very helpful when it comes to cooking or carrying heavy things. It makes it seem more real that way.
lilly i like how you discribed alot of the things you did.
Hi! I really likes how you said that you were scared of the way they live. I also really like how you said that when you got out of the plane a bunch of kids run up to yoou and started singing. I love how you described the food that you ate and how you put in the song by Lam Tungwar.
I love it how you said As the plane landed I was honestly scared after all he told me about the way they live. I thought it was so cute
Amanda
I liked that you explained your emotions when you got out of the plane.
I like your landing and your conversation with John...songs...his hut...home sweet home...I like how you use dialog...meeting John's wife and kids...black beans and fruit...sleeping on the ground...love your waking up to John singing Lam Tungwar-great video..."Shah al khair"-great use of local language...concert...nice picture of John...I like your music video...I hadn't heard that one before.
Lily, you tell a good story. Good use of the blog to tell it. All that was missing was a link. I have only two suggestions:
1. Use and editor to do one final go over for spelling and punctuation. You are close, but your words deserve a final go over and polish.
Maybe stay a bit longer nest time you go so far.
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